Brandon:
Really good job overall. OK, enough of the praise... let's get down to the critique (recognizing that I'm holding you to the highest standards -- as usual):
OPENING
I like the outfit and the shades. You did well using the microphone and projecting a "professional" presence.
At the beginning, you need to introduce yourself (even if someone else introduced you before the tape started rolling). You also need to have a scripted warm up... what you did was pretty good, but I think it can be more focused on magic. "Who has ever seen a magician before raise your hands. That's great, for at least half the people here I'll be the most amazing magician they've ever seen. OK, who here is a magician? Wait, I'd better raise my hand." NOTE: It's still early and I haven't had my second cup of coffee.
FIVE CARD OPENER / HOMING CARDS
I know I suggested to do the five card opener as the first effect, but I don't think it worked as well for kids as I thought it would have. We need to think about this some more. On 5 card opener, you flashed the "packet" at the beginning. I would reduce the number of dis-cards to make the packet thinner. I think you need a small wire trash can slightly in front of you to put the dis-cards in. That will keep you from turning your away from the audience. Also, it looks better. There were flashes on the homing card as you mentioned. Love the "woman are trouble comment." You need to come up with a couple of other jokes that go over the head of the kids and the adults get. In homing card, don't say low number of spot cards. I think I saw a 9 in there. Also, other than magician's, nobody under age 70 will know what a spot card is. Again, the trash can would work well here to get rid of the "queens." The ending for the routine is sort of flat. A line like "maybe I should just do a pick a card trick now" after you reveal the last queen might help, but I think the ending needs some work. I'm thinking maybe some story patter that justifies the queen returning and that makes the final return seem intended.
COLOR CHANGING SHOELACE
Almost perfect. The only thought is that the ending needs something. What about using a yellow 260 Qualatex balloon for the shoelace in your pocket. "Oh, that, it's just a balloon." Blow it up and then twist it so it looks like a tied shoelace.
BIGGER CARD TRICK
I have a better handling of this for you to use. I show the bag empty at the beginning of the effect. I usually have the bag flat and open it up and ask "what's this." It never fails someone yells out that "it's empty!" I have the spectator shuffle the cards and then put three cards into the bag saying I'm going to take three guesses which card is their card. The first two cards should be the same suit but lower... like a 4 of Hearts and a 7 of Hearts. For the first one you ask if you got the suit right and then ask if it is a smaller or a bigger card. For the second one you ask them if it is a smaller card or a bigger card. At this point they yell out BIGGER on their own. Also, I would use a 9 for the Bigger Card -- I think a 10 is to high a number. I think that saying "You told me it was bigger" is better than saying " I made it bigger."
I think you then need to do another Jumbo Card effect with the rest of the deck.
I liked the "that was cool" from the audience.
MISMADE FLAG
I cracked up when the spectator stole your line by saying that his arm was in the change bag.
You need a joke for "what is red, white and blue?" Like, "I though you were going to say a depressed candy cane." You get the idea... I still need more coffee. OK, I'm back after coffee... how about "a depressed, polar bear with sunburn." Ha! I crack myself up. To make that work, you need to do the colors in order, "blue, white and red." That also makes the question harder -- "what is blue, white and red?" and starts to set the stage for things getting confused.
I think that the dropped silk should be the first phase of the routine. Putting all the silks in the first time conditions the audience too much and might cause the spectator to react that way. Also, I think the fact that the spectator dropped one before made him think you really didn't mean to do that!
For the other inverted flag, have a little fun with the kid. Confuse the kid by pointing to the red scarf and telling them to put the blue scarf in. Either way they react, you will get some laughs.
HOW TO BE A WIZARD
Loved it. OK, so I'm biased.
I think you need a better box. Something where there is a top and a bottom and that you can decorate with stars. Not the shipping box, but the box that the effect came it. It would look more magical. Put some crumpled up tissue paper in the box and toss it out when looking for the wand.
I don't think you should ask for a round of applause for the "point and smile." It disrupts the flow. I think the reaction on the first multiplying wand was a little two much. Look at your wand, look at his wand, look at him, look at the audience, shrug your shoulders and then say what's next. Restart at "hand the magic paper to the assistant." I like how the jacket came out... it's perfect. For the second multiplying wand, same as first. Third multiplying wand, I think the line should be "what's going on here?" rather than "what are you doing to me?" I like the figuring out the left hand part... especially how the volunteer mimicked you.
I think you were right, the instruction for shaking the Wabajack should refer to the Wabajack not the Wabajacks (or at least that is what my wife says and she is my go to lay person). The assistant wasn't supposed to turn around, but that worked perfectly... especially with the "you're supposed to be on one foot." You were ready to skip the last instruction.... I think it needs to be tweaked a bit.
~ Carefully open the crumpled ball of ripped up sheets of paper
~ Put the magic wizard's hat on your assistant's head
~ Have your assistant take a bow as the audience gives him a round of applause.
I think that gives a little more clarity to the effect.
MISER'S DREAM
I realize you were rushed but the performance is good. You need some patter with this. Why is it happening?
I think you need to have a little more control at the end. That is going to be hard, but I think you have to give clear instructions. Maybe having each child say their name before throwing the coin.
FINAL THOUGHTS
Really good. You dealt well with some unexpected events. Ask the children who come up on stage their names and remember them for when you say thank you and send them off the stage. At the end of the show, reintroduce yourself and thank the audience. "Thank you so much for watching, I'mBrandon Porterfield and I'm glad we were able to have some fun today."
~ David
Perception of reality is a selection of reality which results in a distortion of reality.